Monday, May 12, 2014

The Dusk

Wooden legs
Slowly
Trudge forward
While the
Foggy brain
Runs
The to-do list
Over and over,
(Halfheartedly
Committing remnants
To the
Overused memory)
Just in case
The now so
Tired hands
Have skipped
Or forgotten
Something.
Is the dusk
Crawling on me?



24 comments:

  1. This is a unique and creative take on the question. I liked it a lot.

    As I age, the "to do list" is becoming my new best friend.

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    1. Thank you so much Psychochef. It is great to hear from you.

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  2. In this multi-tasking society in which we all find ourselves, you have struck a nerve with this post. I can feel the fatigue in your words. Well done!

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    1. Thank you so much Tom. I am glad the little piece works well.

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  3. At the end of the day, I'm sure we've all had this feeling.

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  4. You really captured weariness here - even the format of the poem contributes to the feeling. Nice job - thanks for linking it up!

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    1. Thank you so much for the prompt and your positive encouragement, Christine.

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  5. Oh wow, love it.. love how you describe the aging.. love the last line, too.. nicely done!

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    1. The last line was written first and then the rest of the compilation. I am so encouraged by your positive feedback. Thank you so much.

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    1. Thank you so much Jennifer for your appreciation.

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  7. to do to do to do, such an onerous list and definitely designed for you to forget something. Good write.

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    1. Well, you really nailed the spirit of the to-do lists. Thank you so much, Ann.

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    1. I am glad you think so, thewizardsword. Thank you so much.

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  9. Wow, you just sapped the energy right out of me, Ruby! Great poem.

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    1. Thank you so much Kymm. It is a real compliment to have you visiting and showering such support.

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  10. wow weariness captured perfectly.

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    1. I am glad the attempt is getting such positive reviews. Thank you so much Jen.

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  11. What a gem of a piece about ageing and its cons-loved it!

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    1. Thank you so much Atreyee for your lovely words.

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    1. Thank you so much Gina. It is a real pleasure to hear from you.

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