Thursday, April 4, 2013

Dash against Darkness

His walk was more
Dash against the darkness.
Lonely march in lonely lanes.
You could hear voices.

And feel fear.
He wrapped his saffron cloak
A little more tightly
Never breaking his rhythm.
Save for a momentary,
Unnoticeable pause
At the sound of trinkets.
His steps quickened.
But not enough.
The clinking trinkets drew him closer.
And closer. And closer.
Till that lackluster night
Came alive in her
Pristine silver radiance.
Like a moonbeam
On a full moon night
Walking in beauty.
Singing. Dancing.
Tempting. Enticing.
Abandoning.

He has been hunting
The lanes, ever since.
Thriving on rain and mercy.

Linking with Blogging A to Z - Letter D

34 comments:

  1. I like how you combined all the prompts and gave them life in the pristine silver radiance!

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    1. Thank you so much Robyn. Thank you so much.

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  2. WOW! Look at you and all your link ups! You are amazing!

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    1. Thank you so much Heather. But I think I got one of them wrong - the one about rain.

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  3. I love the line, "He has been hunting the lanes ever since." Haunting and beautiful.

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    1. Thank you Lumdog. This was the whole idea to make it hauntingly beautiful. Glad that I could achieve it.

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  4. Hello

    Dropping in from the A-Z challenge.

    This is a very pretty blog, Ruby.

    Best wishes,
    Debbie W
    http://writingworkshopsandcompetitions.blogspot.co.uk/

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  5. That last stanza, Ruby, is just gorgeous.

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    1. Thank you Kymm. I enjoyed writing it too.

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  6. Excellent. Very vivid. I like the way you capture movement. (RogRites).

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    1. Thank you so much BetaRules (RogRites) for such encouraging words.

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  7. Lovely, Ruby. The moonbeam on a full moon night walking in beauty. I love that.

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    1. Thank you Stephanie. I personally like this line too so we both match :)

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  8. This is really lovely. Dash against darkness and saffron coat. Love.

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    1. Thank you so much Kelly. I am so happy to hear such kind words from you.

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  9. Awesome use of the prompt! And the poem as a whole is very cool.

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    1. Thank you Draug. This is a great compliment :)

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  10. Holy linkup!! This is really haunting and beautiful.

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    1. Thank you editors :) I really look forward to hearing from you.

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  11. What a haunting ending! I loved the finale. The description of the moon was stunning as well, as if she was a living-breathing creature. Great writing! Thanks for contributing this week to Picture it & write.

    - Ermisenda

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  12. Wow, combining 3 prompts?! Very well done!

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  13. You are one smart person..so many challenges up your sleeve..I cant seem to handle one...well, good luck..
    Loved your poem.

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    1. Thank you so much Sini for these kind words.

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  14. Beautiful and leaves me wanting more~

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    1. Thank you. It is so good to hear from you Connie.

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  15. The saffron background on your page really brought out the color in his robe!

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    1. Thank you so much. It is good to hear such positive feedback.

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