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Tuesday, November 6, 2012

Faint glimmer in heart


Ripe autumn air’s come to bless.
Showering sweet November caress.
We could be holding hands and walking,
Silent but still talking.
Faint glimmer in heart.
White winters, no flowers in sight.
Frosty December moonless night.
And here I am hoping for your arm,
To keep me safe, to keep me warm.
Faint glimmer in heart.
The year twenty twelve is leap they say.
Oh! I can hope some more, there’s one more day.
Hope for smiling summers with you,
Hope for blessings to rain through.
Faint glimmer in heart.
Dying, not yet vanished,
There’s a faint glimmer in this heart.

Linking with Trifecta : Week Fifty

39 comments:

  1. I absolutly love this. Beautifully done!

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    1. Thank you Bo. I was not sure how it would go down with others. I am glad you like it.

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  2. I love the visuals in this one, and the rhythme and metre is excellent.

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    1. Thank you Miskmask. Sometimes it is good to return to the basic rhyming rambling.

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  3. This is nice! I like how she cherishes their time and looks forward to more days together.

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    1. Thank you Janna. I really appreciate your stopping by and appreciating this.

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  4. I love how a leap year gives her/him one more beautiful day to hope and cherish. Lovely write.

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    1. Thank you Varsha. I like the him / her version in your compliment. Now that I see it again, yes it suits either one of them.

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  5. sweet love story here - full of longing and need. Very nice.

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    1. i am so thankful to you for such kind words, Barbara.

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  6. ..holding hands and walking, silent but still talking... nice meter, nice image.

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    1. Thank you Kymm - this is my favorite part from the poem too.

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  7. This is so pretty but rather aching too... Just like love.

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    1. Thank you Natalie. I had imagined the adjective aching but pretty is an added bonus. Thank you so much.

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  8. This is one of my favorite pieces by you. There's a beautiful flow to this.

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  9. There's a sadness woven in this poem, but still a small bit of hope.

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  10. I love the flow of the words and the bitter sweetness of the piece (:

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    1. Thank you Draug. It is encouraging to hear from you.

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  11. Great blend of emotions. Well done. (RogRites)

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    1. Thank you RogRites (Beta Rules). I was wondering how best to bring both the prompts together and suddenly this poem happened.

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  12. I liked this one a lot. nice lyricism but with a touch of sadness with the joy :-)

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    1. Thank you Steven. It really is so good to hear such encouraging words.

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  13. Lovely - the emotion, the images, the flow - and the title. That's what I love about Trifecta - the mix of poets and writers. I haven't studied much poetry or read much for that matter. Reading the poetry here makes me want to do just that. Your work is so nice.

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    1. Thank you Stephanie. I am so honored that you would think that.

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  14. What a lovely poem, well written and i get the emotions in it, love it! x susan

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    1. Thank you Susan, I am glad to hear such encouragement from you.

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  15. I love the idea of that extra day as precious; we don't usually stop to think about it as it flies by.

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    1. Thank you Annabelle. I had read some blog post about what special you would do on the extra day of the leap year. Guess that remained in the sub-conscious.

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  16. this is so pretty! <3
    these were my fav lines: "We could be holding hands and walking, Silent but still talking."

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    1. We match. This is my favorite part too :)
      Thank you Renada.

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  17. Ruby this is wonderful. Very sweet with just a touch of sadness. A joy to read. :D

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    1. Thank you Linda. I am glad you enjoyed reading this. It is always a pleasure to hear from you.

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