One day you loitered through my mind,
an unhurried thought, distinct and clear,
unlike the hazy and fogged rushes,
and the train of my thoughts slowed.
I dwelled on us for some time
and then I laughed off the idea, brushed it aside,
vigorously erasing the traces
etched by it on the slate of my mind
but some markers are permanent
and try as hard as you might
you cannot rub out their writings from the board.
You now linger in my thoughts,
like an indelible ink stain on paper.
And I translate you into
syllables, words, proses and poems.
Linking with Thin Spiral Notebook: 100 words: Idea
What a beautiful way to describe an idea! I wish I could write poetry!
ReplyDeleteThank you so much Melissa for such kind words.
DeleteYou do the word "idea" justice! Love your poem, Ruby!
ReplyDeleteThank you so much Gina.
DeleteI love this! It's absolutely beautiful.
ReplyDeleteThank you Karin
DeleteThis is beautiful. I only wish my ideas were so lovely.
ReplyDeleteIts so pleasing to hear such encouraging words. Thank you so much Renee
DeleteA beautiful description of the ideas that float into our heads.
ReplyDeleteThank you so much Ally
DeleteExactly. Well done.
ReplyDeleteThank you Lou.
DeleteWonderful, ruby.. I love the idea of someone loitering in my mind...
ReplyDelete:) thank you stephanie.
DeleteIts good to see so many interpretations of one post
This was perfect in every way...the way a person lingers in my mind, on your skin, deep down is such a universal thing.
ReplyDeleteThank you Kir for such positive feedback.
DeleteThat was gorgeous!
ReplyDeleteYou made my day ... Thank you so much Troy
Deletelovely, Ruby
ReplyDeleteThank you Barbara
DeleteExcellent piece, and can I just say that I adore the word "loiter?" It's just perfect to envision a thought loitering through the mind.
ReplyDeleteThank you so much Joe. It is heartening to hear such warm words of appreciation
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