The rain birthed life everywhere.
The dry, parched earth sucked in the nectar- its thirst insatiable .Oh for the fragrances
that lingered - fresh and pristine – like the swirls of incense in the air. After
sweltering summers, the rain was a pleasant welcome. Every one experienced unparalleled
joy – everyone felt ecstatic as they bathed in the beauty of the pelting drops.
One - two – hundred – thousands of drops – that ended the might of the Sun –
that devastated the cruel and merciless rule of heat – that cleansed, smoothed
and soothed the scorched and cindered beings.
Yesterday, the rains possessed us
all.
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I like the way you stepped outside of a person and into nature with clear and concise imagery. It rained here today, and you described it well.
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DeleteHow beautiful! We had a few dark clouds pass by our home yesterday and I was praying they would give us a refreshing shower to perk up our garden but it wasn't meant to be.
ReplyDeleteThank you for stopping by my blog and leaving the sweet comment. Hope you have a wonderful weekend!
Thank you Sherry. The onset of the monsoons has been delayed almost everywhere. May be that is why you did not have any rains. But I will pray for a cool and refreshing rain shower for you.
DeleteIt is good to have you visiting. Reading your blogs is always a pleasure.
You too have a blessed and lovely weekend ahead.
Lovely poetry. :) Where I grew up, the first rain after a long period of dryness always made us very happy...
ReplyDeleteThank you Cathy :) It is so good to be able to share the thoughts with you.
DeleteLove the poetry of this.
ReplyDeleteLovely. Flowed so smoothly and had nice imagery.
ReplyDeleteThank you Patricia for the kind words.
DeleteThe imagery here is really lovely. A small thing - I might use a different word than "breathed" for rain bringing the ground and land back to life. Breathed speaks to me more as air than water, so it jarred me a bit at the beginning.
ReplyDeleteThank you Angela. I totally agree breathed is used more with air and water. I was kind of stuck up there and after that it became easy to write. A great learning for me. Thank you so much.
DeleteLots of vivid imagery here. I agree with Angela, but I have no suggestion that would fit. Maybe "returned"?
ReplyDeleteThank you Shelton. I will try and improvise for the future.
Delete"The rain possessed us all" is a lovely thought.
ReplyDeleteThank you Cameron.
DeleteHere's a thought for you on the "Rain breathed life" issue - "Rain birthed life". May tie in with the water idea better. Not entirely sure how it would flow, but it's a thought. I think you did a great job with the piece. Simple and elegant - definitely the way to go!
ReplyDeleteThank you Wisper. I guess your suggestion rings well with me and I am editing the post in tandem with the suggestion. Thank you so much.
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