She had put in a long day at
office and was about to begin the homeward journey – same route, same hills, and
same river that she had travelled in the morning. Only, the twilight was making
the hills looks sinister, the sound of the rushing water scary, the unplanned
bus halts irritating, and the loaded bus suffocating. Relief would not come what
with the meandering roads, the treacherous turns, the unruly drivers and the
narrow paths. This was not the way it looked on the other days. But she was
good two hours late today. And it was almost night – almost. She shivered at
the thought. She looked around her. No feminine silhouette visible. Only rugged and unkempt males – they had all
put in hard labor during the day, some of the persons in the back seats
appeared drunk, the one who sat behind her smelled strongly of tobacco. She clung
to her handbag a little more tightly. She
was scared. She tried to busy
herself with the scenery outside but with dark coming in rapidly, her thoughts
returned to her fears. She counted three ravaging forest fires – the bright
orange against the black night. She saw the lights of the temples and the echo
of the evening prayers and felt some of the strength returning. It would take
just half an hour more from here on. And she counted almost every second in
that half hour. Finally, the bus was circuiting the familiar turns of her
hometown. She disembarked at the rather empty looking bus stand. Her father was waiting there for her to take her home. Once inside her cozy nest, they all laughed and talked and ate and watched
TV. Her fears were gone - at least for now - only to return in the night when nestled under
the covers, waiting for the fan and sleep to silence her thoughts – she would wonder – if her new job was worth all the travails?
Linking with the Trifecta : Week Thirty
Linking with the Trifecta : Week Thirty
Well written narrative. I could imagine her fear and then relief.
ReplyDeleteThank you Carver. I am glad the narrative could bring out her feelings.
Deletevery dramatic. interesting.
ReplyDeleteBrave woman. I would be thinking the same thoughts. I hope a good solution will be found.
ReplyDeleteI hope the same. It is good to see that our thoughts match. Thanks for visit Cathy.
DeleteWell done Ruby, it was so real and I felt scared along with the bus driver! It also reminded me of driving along a hilly road with only green and the sky around!
ReplyDeleteThank you Maya. I am glad I could do justice to this piece.
DeleteI would think along the same lines...its it worth it? I'm a scaredy cat so this made the hairs on my neck raise.
ReplyDeleteThank you Gina, it is a great compliment to see you feeling what the protagonist was going through.
DeleteYou do a great job conveying a sense of fear and isolation -- it made me nervous! I was relieved when she reached home at the end.
ReplyDeleteThank you for reading and appreciating the emotions of the story, Annabelle.
Deletenice narrative ruby.
ReplyDeleteit has been a good experience reading your blog.
i am subscribing to it.
cheers.
Thank you Raghav. Your words are so encouraging and inspiring. I am glad to have your company in this blogging journey.
DeleteI'd have to wonder if it was worth it, too. I've ridden a bus in the city, so I can relate to the uneasy feeling she had on the bus. So glad she ended up home safe and sound!
ReplyDeleteI am glad her feeling filtered through to all. It is good to have such an appreciation. Thank you for reading this.
DeleteIt sounds like quite the exhausting and harrowing trip. This week we were looking for the third definition of the word new as defined on the Trifecta website.
ReplyDeleteThanks for linking up and we hope to see you back tomorrow for the new prompt.
Thank you editors. I would be more than happy to join in.
DeleteThe tension here was gorgeous. I feared for this woman on a crowded bus, and I was so glad someone was waiting at that deserted bus stop.
ReplyDeleteMe too. It is good to have a comforting hand when you need it the most. Thanks Jessie.
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