“There’s nothing
cute about it,” he said. The register of his voice indicated decision more so
than discussion.
She disagreed heartily and privately, staring past his head and out the window behind him.
She disagreed heartily and privately, staring past his head and out the window behind him.
Ever
since Maria's loss her son had not been his normal self. He was alive but not
whole.
"Life is
too lovely to be wasted away", she said at length in mere whispers.
In response to Trifextra - Week Nine
There aren't too many sad ones for this prompt. Very moving and poetic.
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DeleteThis one gave me a little shiver. It has an airy feeling that I really enjoyed.
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DeleteI like the idea of two people who share a loss responding to it drastically differently. I was unclear about who was speaking to Maria's son if Maria was dead? Or who had been lost if Maria was the speaker?
ReplyDeleteI think I have not been ale to weave it properly but the conversation was between a son who was suffering a loss and his mother.
Deletelovely writing, and in just 33 words.
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Thank you
DeleteGood writing always has a little truth in it, as does yours.
ReplyDeleteHow lovely!
ReplyDeleteWell done.
I really would like to write but seem to be avoiding it some!
Greetings from Cottage Country! Too much fun taking photos and blogging!
I am glad you liked this piece and thanks for this visit too. I am looking forward to reading your posts.
DeleteOh, not heartbreak. But you captured it well. Good writing!
ReplyDeleteSo sweet and sad. But I like to think Maria's gentleness and coaxing will have her son "back" in due time.
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DeleteI think Maria is his dead wife (?)
ReplyDeleteYes, I had written it to be that way but it I am not sure if it came out clearly because there are many interpretations to this one.
DeleteI actually did get that it was a conversation between the son and the mom. It took me two reads to be certain, but it is there. (Don't know if you reworked it since above comments ...)
ReplyDeleteBeautiful, also heartbreaking.
Thank You Karen. And No, I have not re-worked the original write-up. So, it pleases me when you get the meaning behind these 33 words of mine.
DeleteVery touching!
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