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Dash against Darkness

His walk was more
Dash against the darkness.
Lonely march in lonely lanes.
You could hear voices.

And feel fear.
He wrapped his saffron cloak
A little more tightly
Never breaking his rhythm.
Save for a momentary,
Unnoticeable pause
At the sound of trinkets.
His steps quickened.
But not enough.
The clinking trinkets drew him closer.
And closer. And closer.
Till that lackluster night
Came alive in her
Pristine silver radiance.
Like a moonbeam
On a full moon night
Walking in beauty.
Singing. Dancing.
Tempting. Enticing.
Abandoning.

He has been hunting
The lanes, ever since.
Thriving on rain and mercy.

Linking with Trifecta: Week Seventy-One
Linking with Velvet Verbosity : 100 Words - Lackluster
Linking with Picture it and Write - Ermiliablog
Linking with Blogging A to Z - Letter D
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  1. UnknownApril 4, 2013 at 8:46 AM

    I like how you combined all the prompts and gave them life in the pristine silver radiance!

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  2. HeatherLApril 4, 2013 at 12:16 PM

    WOW! Look at you and all your link ups! You are amazing!

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    1. Whispering ThoughtsApril 4, 2013 at 5:39 PM

      Thank you so much Heather. But I think I got one of them wrong - the one about rain.

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  3. lumdog2012April 4, 2013 at 12:23 PM

    I love the line, "He has been hunting the lanes ever since." Haunting and beautiful.

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    1. Whispering ThoughtsApril 4, 2013 at 5:41 PM

      Thank you Lumdog. This was the whole idea to make it hauntingly beautiful. Glad that I could achieve it.

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  4. UnknownApril 4, 2013 at 1:44 PM

    Hello

    Dropping in from the A-Z challenge.

    This is a very pretty blog, Ruby.

    Best wishes,
    Debbie W
    http://writingworkshopsandcompetitions.blogspot.co.uk/

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  5. kymmApril 4, 2013 at 2:33 PM

    That last stanza, Ruby, is just gorgeous.

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  6. BetaRulesApril 4, 2013 at 2:44 PM

    Excellent. Very vivid. I like the way you capture movement. (RogRites).

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    1. Whispering ThoughtsApril 4, 2013 at 5:43 PM

      Thank you so much BetaRules (RogRites) for such encouraging words.

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  7. StephApril 4, 2013 at 3:26 PM

    Lovely, Ruby. The moonbeam on a full moon night walking in beauty. I love that.

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    1. Whispering ThoughtsApril 4, 2013 at 5:44 PM

      Thank you Stephanie. I personally like this line too so we both match :)

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  8. UnknownApril 4, 2013 at 5:16 PM

    This is really lovely. Dash against darkness and saffron coat. Love.

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    1. Whispering ThoughtsApril 4, 2013 at 5:45 PM

      Thank you so much Kelly. I am so happy to hear such kind words from you.

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  9. DraugApril 4, 2013 at 6:46 PM

    Awesome use of the prompt! And the poem as a whole is very cool.

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  10. TrifectaApril 4, 2013 at 6:58 PM

    Holy linkup!! This is really haunting and beautiful.

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    1. Whispering ThoughtsApril 4, 2013 at 7:01 PM

      Thank you editors :) I really look forward to hearing from you.

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  11. ermisendaApril 4, 2013 at 7:09 PM

    What a haunting ending! I loved the finale. The description of the moon was stunning as well, as if she was a living-breathing creature. Great writing! Thanks for contributing this week to Picture it & write.

    - Ermisenda

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  12. FairviewApril 4, 2013 at 7:21 PM

    Wow, combining 3 prompts?! Very well done!

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  13. Sini RachelApril 5, 2013 at 3:52 AM

    You are one smart person..so many challenges up your sleeve..I cant seem to handle one...well, good luck..
    Loved your poem.

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  14. Ma and PaApril 5, 2013 at 6:28 AM

    Beautiful and leaves me wanting more~

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  15. UnknownApril 5, 2013 at 8:13 AM

    well done!

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  16. BarbApril 5, 2013 at 8:33 AM

    What a great D post!

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  17. AnonymousApril 5, 2013 at 1:22 PM

    The saffron background on your page really brought out the color in his robe!

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    1. Whispering ThoughtsApril 5, 2013 at 7:23 PM

      Thank you so much. It is good to hear such positive feedback.

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