The 12 inch heel, the confident gait, The measured steps, the sudden halt, The blush on cheeks, the smoldering eyes, The hands on hips, head held high, The silken gown, barely there, A tilt of neck, balanced well, The sultry glance, timed right, Perfect half twirl, played twice, With a graceful swirl, she turns back. The world looks on with stolen breath, Oohs, aahs, applauds, encores. The showstopper’s yesterday, Now hangs in a gallery, Fading parchment, guarded unnecessarily. No shadows of glamour come a-chasing, For vacant eyes and sagging skin, For shattering illusions, hanging questions, Am I never going back? Linking with The Mag : Mag 147 Linking with Write on Edge : The Red Writing Hood - The Gallery Linking with My blog can beat up your blog : 100 Word Song : Never going back to Ok Linking with The Velvet Verbosity : 100 Words - Breath
Makes me curious for more which is always a sign of good writing.
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DeleteMethinks the Muse might have been a bit of a devil...hence, the breakup ;)
ReplyDeleteI love this me thinks :) Thank you so much Rebecca
DeleteClever and unique take on the prompt
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Ally:)
Thank you so much Ally :)
Deletehe.. they seem to have an interesting conversation...
ReplyDeleteYeah, wish we could be part of his musings but he preferred to be lonely :) Thank you so much Bjorn
DeleteInteresting take on the prompt♥
ReplyDeleteThank you so much Kathy :) <3
DeleteFunny how he was drawn to it. The photo is perfect to reflect the mirrored angry posture :)
ReplyDelete:) Thank you Janna
DeleteLove it! That's one way I wouldn't mind it going wrong somehow.
ReplyDeleteThank you Kymm for such positive feedback :)
DeleteI love this "She had crafted it in anger. So daily, he stood there." So much like those of us "in love" so often did, just to preserve what we never truly had in the first.
ReplyDeleteThat's pretty insightful. Thank you so much
Deletewhat a great opening to drawing the reader into wanting the rest of that story!
ReplyDeleteThank you so much for such inspiring words
DeleteI love this take, the use of visdare's prompt in it adds an extra kick.
ReplyDeleteThank you so much Carol for such nice words
DeleteThis could easily lead into quite a bit more. Very nicely done.
ReplyDeleteThank you so much for such encouraging words
DeleteLoved this.
ReplyDeleteI like that he's drawn to it even though it's probably not the most flattering likeness. It's as if she's cast a spell on him. Very cool take on the prompt.
ReplyDeleteThank you so much Ivy :)
DeleteThis is great! I want to know more. Very interesting.
ReplyDeleteThank you so much Ashley. It is so good to hear from you
DeleteI love how you drew your inspiration!
ReplyDeleteThank you so much Draug :)
DeleteExcellent, creative take on the prompt!
ReplyDeleteThank you so much :)
DeleteThis is great - I read it three times, and liked it more each time I read it. It's a really thoughtful piece. Wonderful job.
ReplyDeleteThank you so much for such encouraging words :)
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