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The Sacred Sacrifice - Chapter 4

CHAPTER 4 9 Poh - The Journey to Sirhind After the heart-wrenching separation at the banks of the Sarsa River, Mata Gujri Ji and her two you...

Friday, August 2, 2013

Shadow-dance

Life:
A dance of shadows;
Momentary flickers
Saltating
And
Then
Fading
Into
The backstage;
The characters
Flitting
In and out
Of plot
At
Just
The right time;
The story
Woven
Worth

The applause.

33 comments:

  1. Nice one Ruby. You're right, we're on the same track :)

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  2. i devoured this.. keep on writing! =)

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    1. Thank you so much Walktofree. this is so encouraging.

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  3. what beautiful, flowing prose. Oh Ruby, I loved this. Loved the ending..it was worthy of it's own ovation.

    TGIF my friend. xo

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    1. Thank you so much Kir. I am really touched with such wonderful compliments from you.
      TGIF :)

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  4. The characters
    Flitting
    In and out
    Of plot
    At
    Just
    The right time
    How precise and beautiful - very nice!

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    1. Thank you so much. I am glad the little piece goes down so well with all of you

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  5. I like where you went with this. People do drift in and out of our lives, until we take our final bow.

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  6. This is just lovely. So well written!

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  7. momentary flickers... and the woven story.
    Very nice, Ruby!

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    1. Thank you Kymm, it is always a pleasure to hear from you

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  8. This is brilliant, Ruby. What an amazing ending, too!

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  9. This sort of captures the mystique of the backstage. I like it.

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    1. Thank you Draug :) It is always an honour to hear such kind words from you

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  10. I had to Google saltating. I love learning new words:) Thanks for linking up!

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  11. A good one Ruby, shadows are more than we acknowledge on most days.

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  12. If we stopped to actually count all of the people who have flitted in and out of our lives, I am sure we would be stunned at how high the total would be. The better number is how many of stood the test of time and are still here, by our sides. You have spoken of this side of our lives with the skill of a seamstress; weaving just the right words in just the right spots to create an expression of high fashion and beauty. Superbly done, Ruby!

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    1. Thank you so much Tom. I am really, truly honored to hear such kind words and appreciation. Thank you so much for all the encouragement you all lend.

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  13. I love the way you crafted this, Ruby. You have a knack for pinning down the fleeting thought.

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    1. Thank you so much Linda :) Coming from you this is truly an honor

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  14. So beautiful! Love the structure. And I particularly love the last four lines.

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Since every thought is a seed, I am looking forward to a delicious harvest.