Friday, June 7, 2013

The last minute

I fall, struggle a little, sink, some bubbles, some ripples and then it’s over, she thought.
She toyed with the idea for a while, took a deep sigh, threw back her shoulders and walked away from the bridge.
December night was catching on and the water would be freezing.

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  1. December Nights would never be the same. (Visited from LisaJo's place.)

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    1. Thank you so much Stephanie for your visit and for sharing kind words.

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  2. Loved this, sad, but with hope. Thanks for sharing... visiting from 5 minute friday...

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    1. Thank you so much Maxine. I am glad that hope filters through.

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  3. Oh, I'm so glad she didn't jump. There is always a solution, even when you think there isn't.

    I loved the first line, how she was cataloging the things as they would happen.

    Great 3 sentences.

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    1. Thank you so much Kir. It is good to hear such encouragement from you.

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  4. I like how so many of your stories have this little touch of hope. Very encouraging and uplifting.

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    1. Thank you so much Tara. I am still experimenting with writing especially prose. It is good to have everyone's support

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  5. Glorious hopeful and just a little dark humour. Nice.

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  6. I hope she can keep finding reasons not to jump :)

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  7. This is great - I love the ending line.

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  8. Lovely description of the thought process and change of mind.

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    1. Thank you so much. It is so good to hear such encouraging words from you

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  9. Liked. Thought processes and the prospect of cold water held less of an appeal than ending a life....

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    1. Thank you Rebecca. It is good to hear from you.

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  10. So she stopped for a practical reason. Let's hope she can find a more sound reason to stay around before spring comes along!

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    1. I hope the same, Draug :) and yes, thank you for your visit

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  11. I love the idea that she's willing to die, but not willing to freeze. That she talks herself down from the ledge by reminding herself that there are, in essence, less pleasant things than whatever she is living with right now. Well done.

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    1. Thank you so much Jester. I really cherish hearing from you :) this is a great encouragement

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  12. I think most people have those fleeting moments, but I love that the practical nature of a cold night and colder water sends her home. I love this.

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  13. Oh what a wrenching topic. I'm glad she went home.

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    1. Inside, even I am glad that she went home. Thank you so much Ann

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  14. So much going on. The consequences no one will know how they could have been. Well written. (RogRites)

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    1. Thank you so much Rogrites. It is good to hear from you

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  15. Ha! I love that the thought of cold water is what turned her off the idea. Shows that maybe, just maybe, she wasn't really wanting to go through with it.

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    1. There is always that last minute decision that is the real test

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  16. Oh, how many bridges do we walk away from over time? Great piece!

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  17. So much in three sentences... Well done. I like the practical side of the narrator -almost like an irony- and hope that throwing back her shoulders means she will not return when the water is warmer.

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    1. Thank you Vesper. I share your hope :)

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  18. A little contemplation can make the heart and mind synchronize and see the fallacy of the plan. Visiting from Trifecta.

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    1. That's quite a wise thought. Thank you Dobson

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Since every thought is a seed, I am looking forward to a delicious harvest.