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There is a sight I hold dear. A misty morning, a grey veil, green hills in the background, lush and abundant. On the fore, at about 100 feet...

Friday, June 7, 2013

The last minute

I fall, struggle a little, sink, some bubbles, some ripples and then it’s over, she thought.
She toyed with the idea for a while, took a deep sigh, threw back her shoulders and walked away from the bridge.
December night was catching on and the water would be freezing.

Linking with Trifextra - Week Seventy-One - Three sentence story
Linking with Five Minute Friday - Fall
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40 comments:

  1. ~Stephanie WaferJune 7, 2013 at 10:20 AM

    December Nights would never be the same. (Visited from LisaJo's place.)

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    1. Whispering ThoughtsJune 8, 2013 at 7:29 AM

      Thank you so much Stephanie for your visit and for sharing kind words.

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  2. ~Maxine~June 7, 2013 at 10:27 AM

    Loved this, sad, but with hope. Thanks for sharing... visiting from 5 minute friday...

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    1. Whispering ThoughtsJune 8, 2013 at 7:30 AM

      Thank you so much Maxine. I am glad that hope filters through.

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  3. KirJune 7, 2013 at 12:04 PM

    Oh, I'm so glad she didn't jump. There is always a solution, even when you think there isn't.

    I loved the first line, how she was cataloging the things as they would happen.

    Great 3 sentences.

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    1. Whispering ThoughtsJune 8, 2013 at 7:37 AM

      Thank you so much Kir. It is good to hear such encouragement from you.

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  4. Tara R.June 7, 2013 at 8:53 PM

    I like how so many of your stories have this little touch of hope. Very encouraging and uplifting.

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    1. Whispering ThoughtsJune 8, 2013 at 7:38 AM

      Thank you so much Tara. I am still experimenting with writing especially prose. It is good to have everyone's support

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  5. UnknownJune 8, 2013 at 2:58 AM

    Glorious hopeful and just a little dark humour. Nice.

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  6. AnonymousJune 8, 2013 at 8:40 AM

    I hope she can keep finding reasons not to jump :)

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  7. UnknownJune 8, 2013 at 9:22 AM

    This is great - I love the ending line.

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  8. AnonymousJune 8, 2013 at 12:28 PM

    Lovely description of the thought process and change of mind.

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    1. Whispering ThoughtsJune 8, 2013 at 11:22 PM

      Thank you so much. It is so good to hear such encouraging words from you

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  9. rebeccaJune 8, 2013 at 1:59 PM

    Liked. Thought processes and the prospect of cold water held less of an appeal than ending a life....

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  10. DraugJune 8, 2013 at 7:48 PM

    So she stopped for a practical reason. Let's hope she can find a more sound reason to stay around before spring comes along!

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    1. Whispering ThoughtsJune 8, 2013 at 11:25 PM

      I hope the same, Draug :) and yes, thank you for your visit

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  11. lumdog2012June 9, 2013 at 7:05 AM

    Poignant story. Well done.

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  12. Jester QueenJune 9, 2013 at 8:25 AM

    I love the idea that she's willing to die, but not willing to freeze. That she talks herself down from the ledge by reminding herself that there are, in essence, less pleasant things than whatever she is living with right now. Well done.

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    1. Whispering ThoughtsJune 10, 2013 at 8:39 AM

      Thank you so much Jester. I really cherish hearing from you :) this is a great encouragement

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  13. UnknownJune 9, 2013 at 9:47 AM

    I think most people have those fleeting moments, but I love that the practical nature of a cold night and colder water sends her home. I love this.

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  14. Ann BennettJune 9, 2013 at 3:05 PM

    Oh what a wrenching topic. I'm glad she went home.

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    1. Whispering ThoughtsJune 10, 2013 at 8:40 AM

      Inside, even I am glad that she went home. Thank you so much Ann

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  15. BetaRulesJune 9, 2013 at 3:55 PM

    So much going on. The consequences no one will know how they could have been. Well written. (RogRites)

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    1. Whispering ThoughtsJune 10, 2013 at 8:41 AM

      Thank you so much Rogrites. It is good to hear from you

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  16. AnonymousJune 9, 2013 at 8:36 PM

    Ha! I love that the thought of cold water is what turned her off the idea. Shows that maybe, just maybe, she wasn't really wanting to go through with it.

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    1. Whispering ThoughtsJune 10, 2013 at 8:42 AM

      There is always that last minute decision that is the real test

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  17. kymmJune 10, 2013 at 4:24 AM

    Oh, how many bridges do we walk away from over time? Great piece!

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  18. CarverJune 10, 2013 at 11:22 AM

    Very well written.

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  19. VesperJune 10, 2013 at 8:41 PM

    So much in three sentences... Well done. I like the practical side of the narrator -almost like an irony- and hope that throwing back her shoulders means she will not return when the water is warmer.

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  20. DobsonJune 11, 2013 at 7:55 AM

    A little contemplation can make the heart and mind synchronize and see the fallacy of the plan. Visiting from Trifecta.

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Since every thought is a seed, I am looking forward to a delicious harvest.

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