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Monday, April 8, 2013

A game it was ...


A game
It was.
You and me,
Together.
A tree house
For us
And
A little world
Therein.
Fighting a little
And then
Making up
Soon after.
Wooing one another
With those
Handmade goodies.
Crushing leaves
To cook dinner.
And serving coke
For wine.
Things perfect;
Things beautiful
In the
Innocent bliss of
Alchemy
Called love;
Purifying
Everything
It touched.
And then
We grew up
And the
Game was over
Just like that.

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45 comments:

  1. I got "married" when I was 8. He gave me a toy horse, and I believe I made mud pies to celebrate.

    This was a lovely piece of writing, and brings back fond memories when "playing house" was just so much innocent play!

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    1. Thank you Valerie. Your response is so heartening. Thank you so much.

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  2. Sweet and innocent and sad all together. Nicely paced too! Love it.

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  3. Absolutely beautiful. I love serving Coke as wine.

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    1. Thank you so much Kelly. We as kids really did that.

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  4. Coke as wine! ... we did that all the time!! I love this.

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    1. You too ... I loved saying cheers after pouring in coke ... Thank you so much Sandra. I loved hearing from you :)

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  5. "Alchemy called love."

    Beautiful and innocent.

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    1. Thank you so much Megan. I am glad you liked this.

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  6. Absolutely magical-so sad that there was no happy ending-reality sucks-sigh!

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    1. Thank you so much Atreyee -- may be next time i will write one with happy ending. :)

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  7. Agree that this is beautiful and innocent. I remember the crumbled leaves for dinner. My cousin and I spoke of marrying when we were about 8. How disillusioned life turned out just as in your story.

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    1. Life really does come crashing down exactly at the point when all things are falling in place. doesn't it?

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  8. That's beautiful! :)

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  9. Sadly, that's often the way it happens. Stephen King put it this way in his story "Nona."
    "First it was love. Then it was like love. Then it was over."
    Love stinks!
    Beautifully crafted piece.

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    1. I had never read these lines but I really love them now :) Thank you for sharing Tempest.

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  10. This was really sweet but deep and well written. The coke - wine thing made me smile. I had to read it twice to see what you did with alchemy. great stuff, miss ruby

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    1. Thank you so much Lance. It is a pleasure hearing such encouraging words from you.

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  11. good one flowed really well - well said :-)

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  12. Wonderful writing and a great take on the prompt.

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    1. Thank you so much Yarnspinner. I am glad you like this little piece.

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  13. Crushing leaves
    To cook dinner.
    And serving coke
    For wine.

    How all of us did this :-)

    This took me back to tree houses, or castles under blankets, this was wonderful - truly though the game ended the memories will remain. Brilliant writing.

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    1. I am glad that you can relate too. Thank you so much Rambly.

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  14. That was fun. Just like i remember it.

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  15. This is the first entry I've read this week and holy shi--

    I am in love with it. <3

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    1. Thank you Draug .. You just made my day :) You really did.

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  16. I love this! Well done.

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  17. Oh, innocent love. Before we "grow up" and begin to put too much thought into it. Love the format, it is perfect for the words.

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    1. Exactly - before we grow up and begin to put too much thought into it - i totally second this thought. Thank you Renee

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  18. It never occurred to me to use alchemy with love. How sweet and innocent your story is. Loved it.

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    1. Thank you so much. I am so glad to hear such kind words.

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  19. Crushed leaves and coke dinner <3
    Such a sad, true ending! Great poem, Ruby.

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    1. Thank you so much Kymm for your visit and kind words.

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  20. "In the
    Innocent bliss of
    Alchemy
    Called love"
    Great line! And great writing.

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    1. Thank you so much. These words are really encouraging.

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  21. Bittersweet, but a perfect encapsulation of childhood imagination. Nice

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  22. I guess the tree house didn't come with bills?

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Since every thought is a seed, I am looking forward to a delicious harvest.