Saturday, March 2, 2013

Home calling


I, me, mine echoes all around.
The temples ache, and so does the heart.
Ah! I long for mother’s lap.
To empty the burdens
That I carry.
I long to be at home.

37 comments:

  1. 1st person is hard to write sometimes - the nuns used to frown upon it . . . when I am writing letters and see "i, I, I, I" I wince because I'm expecting a ruler over my knuckles. :)

    You did a great job!

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    1. Thank you Barbara. I so agree. 1st person can be so hard to write in.

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  2. Beautifully written- home is where the heart doth lie.

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    1. I love the way you say it, Rambly. Thank you so much.

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  3. True-there is too much of self-centredness around & a mom's lap is one secure & safe place to be.Wish all of us can have such a safe haven where we can unburden ourselves & feel loved.Beautifully written:-)

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    1. Thank you so much for such kind words on the post.

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  4. A simple statement told in a very creative way. About time we shared more and thought of others more; comfort of home to unburden is seriously underrated when it is much needed. x

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    1. Thank you so much Lizzie. Your words are so encouraging and inspiring.

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  5. This is really beautiful in it's simplicity Ruby.

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    1. Thank you so much for such sweet words.

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  6. There is not a more peaceful place than home. Beautiful writing.

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    1. I second this thought totally. Thank you Deana

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  7. This is a very real and lovely sentiment. Well done!

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    1. Thank you Lumdog. It is so heartening to hear such kind words from you.

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  8. As for me, myself, and I.
    We all long to go back to a time
    Where we didn't have to worry about anything.
    A time when we had love all around us,
    From the only one who could give it without any reservations.

    Wonderful FSF endeavor for this week

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    1. I loved your version more. Thank you so much.

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    2. THANKS Ruby for your KIND COMPLIMENT

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  9. I couldn't tell from your writing that it was difficult. Lovely as always.

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    1. Thank you so much Tara. It is so good to have your support.

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  10. The feeling of longing for comfort is so strong in this piece. Lovely job.

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  11. Excellent use of FSF prompt. I love the sentiment as yes, how we would all still love the comfort of our mother's lap at times. Lovely work.

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  12. A beautifully expressed sentiment so easy to relate to, how often we wish we could return to the simple days of childhood and the comfort of a mother's unconditional love!

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  13. Such a lovely piece of writing! I still get that longing for my mother's lap sometimes. Wonderfully done!

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  14. Despite a fully -lived life of my own, I always enjoy going home to be with my Mom. I know where I live but, "home" is where she is. :)

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    1. I love the way you say it Tom. I really do. Thank you so much.

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  15. Ah to back in mother's lap - even though it's been ages since we fit! Nice poem, Ruby!

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    1. Thank you so much Kymm. It us always a pleasure to hear from you.

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  16. So simple and so beautiful. Thanks for writing, it was a joy to read.

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    1. That's one great compliment Ben. Thank you so much.

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  17. We are all in a hurry to grow up. Never to have that peace of youth again. Well written.

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    1. And then we long for childhood again. Thank you so much, Ann.

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  18. Enjoyed reading this. It brings back memories, especially when I'm sick, how much I'd rather be at home lying on the sofa with my head resting on my mother's lap and her stroking my hair.

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    1. That's a perfect get well soon remedy you shared. Thank you so much dailyshorts.

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