The jam packed six - eight lanes,
The buses almost bursting at their seams,
Yet another lac or so that crowds the metros
I stand amidst a huge milieu ...
Of seemingly empty hearts
Linking with Trifextra : Week Fifty-Five - For this weekend's challenge we're asking you to include some hyperbole in your piece. It doesn't have to be the whole piece, but it needs to be in there, and we're looking for 33 words, as usual.
It's so true. We can be alone and sad, empty, surrounded by hundreds of people. Reminds me of the mindless way people go to work in the city.
ReplyDeleteThank you Gina. It is so good to hear such encouraging words.
DeleteThis is really cool. I love it a lot (:
ReplyDeleteThank you draug.
DeleteAlone in a crowd... You described a big city commute perfectly - good hyperbole!
ReplyDeleteThank you libby
DeleteBeautifully written!
ReplyDeleteThank you atreyee
DeleteBrilliant! I have missed your words.
ReplyDeleteThank you Deana. Your words and support means so much to me.
DeleteYour hyperbole cleverly portrays the travails of a commute. Nice one!
ReplyDeleteThank you Lumdog.
DeleteThis is beautiful. Lovely images. I really like this. :)
ReplyDeleteThank you so much, scriptorwrites
DeleteI thought I already commented on this. Sorry. It's really good!
ReplyDeletemilieu is one of my favorite words...you ahd me there. well done, Ruby
ReplyDeleteThank you so much Lance. I can't tell you how happy I am to hear from you.
DeleteHad to look up "lac" - I've never heard it before.
ReplyDeleteApart from hyperbole, you also rocked irony: all those people and such lonliness.
Thank you Kymm. I realized later the difference of counting systems.
DeleteSounds desolate! :(
ReplyDeleteThank you so much, Joe
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