Playing hide and seek with you
Was so much fun
And all those little games
The stories that you shared
The shadows of the past
Holding hands with you
All come back to me
And it hurts to see
The ants hollowing up
That big old guava tree
The one that you had planted
To give us shade and love.
And like the trunk you held us both
Weak branch clung to your soul
Now that you are gone
There’s no one to hold
The branches and the leaves.
I am kind of incomplete
Like the holes driven through this plaque
But read the words I left behind
Just fill in my name
And when you do so
I hope you see them through
And that they mean something to you
For they would mean the world to me.
Lining up with Trifextra : Week Forty-two - Write between 33-333 words incorporating the following three photos.
Lining up with Trifextra : Week Forty-two - Write between 33-333 words incorporating the following three photos.
This is so lovely (:
ReplyDeleteThank you Draug. That was a quick reply.
DeleteBeautiful :) Not to be cliched, but the lyricism truly sings and I love how you melded the photos together, culminating to that confession of love.
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Thank you so much Lia. I am so happy to hear these words.
DeleteThis is a beautifully written piece. I was especially moved by the last stanza where she hopes the words "...mean something to you for they would mean the world to me."
ReplyDeleteThank you Lumdog 2012. I was hoping these words would fall in place. I guess they did.
DeleteI agree with Lumdog...that last sentence was a sweet ending to a beautiful poem.
ReplyDeleteThank you Janna. I really appreciate all your compliments.
Deletea sweet story, lovingly and lyrically told. good work :)
ReplyDeleteThank you Rashmenon. I am so encouraged by your appreciation.
DeleteHow sweet. Great job with this prompt. :)
ReplyDeleteThank you Cathy. I hope everybody else feels the same :)
DeleteAwww! So romantic, but bittersweet. A dark chocolate piece.
ReplyDeleteThank you TMW Hickman. I like the way you call it a dark chocolate piece. May be I should re-title this one to something like this.
DeleteThis is beautiful. Made me a little teary considering the relationship and its end - now that you're gone got to me. It would mean the world to me holds such emotion. Poignant and nostalgic - great take on the photos.
ReplyDeleteStephanie, I am glad that the story reached out to you and I am sorry for those tears. Thank you for sharing such lovely thoughts on the piece with us.
Delete"I am kind of incomplete." Something about that struck me. Nicely done.
ReplyDeleteThank you so much editors. Your encouragement is something I look forward to.
DeleteThis is amazing Ruby. Gosh you did a good job with this really hard challenge. Bravo! :D
ReplyDeleteThank you Linda. I am so glad that you liked this little piece.
DeleteWeak branch clung to your soul - what a wonderful phrase.
ReplyDeleteThank you Kymm. I am glad you chose this part of the post. This is my favorite.
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