The last strains of sunlight lingered in the corners, grasping every available point of refraction. She slid her fingertips along the glass wondering if this was all there ever was. Or could be.
She knelt at the threshold and kissed its dust. Her parting glance was blurred by silent tears. Then she stepped across. Into the twilight of 14th August, 1947.
A Tryst with Destiny was being made.
Linking with Trifextra : Week Thirty-Two
Very moving description.
ReplyDeleteThank you Carver.
DeleteVery intriguing! This one definitely draws the reader in. Nicely done.
ReplyDeleteThank You Kelly. I am glad you enjoyed it.
DeleteI am curious about this 'she' character. Why would she be sad about India's independence? What was she making a way for?
ReplyDeleteIndia's independence came with a partition that left many heartbroken. She was making way for her new destiny in a new country leaving behind her everything.
DeleteVery well done. It appears her destiny is very signicant. Will we read more?
ReplyDeleteThank you Lumdog. I will need to spend sometime to see if I have just the words needed. But this is close to heart so may be yes. I can't give you a date yet but yes, I will work on this one.
DeleteSci-fi or historical... either way it makes us think. I like that.
ReplyDeleteHistorical. Thank you Stephanie.
DeleteVery emotional - I could feel her sadness. I think this is an interesting historical piece. I hope you'll share more :)
ReplyDeleteYes, Janna. I think of all the other stories, I will definitely work on this one. It might take some time from my side though.
Deletethanks for the tryst with destiny link! great take on the prompt
ReplyDeleteThank you Steven, I shared that link on an impulse.
DeleteThis is a nice paragraph to start a novel.
ReplyDeleteThank you so much. It is really encouraging to hear such positive feedback.
Deletethis is definently a strong, thought provoking piece. i love the idea of her kissing the dust. well done!
ReplyDeleteThank you Renada. I wanted to portray her love for her home and to be seeped in tradition. I am glad it blended well.
DeleteI like the unique perspective you used. :D
ReplyDeleteThank you Linda. Thank you so much.
DeleteI love the way you connected to a shared moment...
ReplyDeleteThank you W. Max Meyer.
DeleteWhat an interesting use of the prompt. Great job!
ReplyDeleteThank you Tessa. It is always good to hear such encouraging words.
DeleteI like how you made this emotional, descriptive and full of action in just 33 words. Very well crafted.
ReplyDeleteThank you Lance. It is good to hear such positive feedback.
DeleteThis is such a great piece :D Lovely response, well done! :D
ReplyDeleteThank you AmyBird. This is so encouraging.
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